168 Words.
Can’t Help But Wonder…
By. Brandon Moore
You came to me, wounds on your wrists,
You said to me, I can’t take it any longer,
I said to you, lets face it together,
You said to me, can’t let you see me in pain,
You said to me, can’t show you the tears,
I said to you, its only human, what can you do?
You said to me, i'll end it all, just wanted to say “goodbye”,
I said to you, you are my all, please don’t leave me,
You said to me, how can I mean that much?
I said to you, I love you, and there’s only on of you,
You said to me, I’ve been told that before, what makes you any different?
I said to you, you will know by my actions, stay long enough to see them….
Now we recall that time together, and I can’t help but wonder, what would have happened had you ended it all there in front of me?
Copyright 2008, Brandon Moore.
2 comments:
it's a good start but i'm not so sure about the repetition in it...maybe say the first part and then say " you said." after it...maybe...idk. good start though. :)
I actually based this poem on a song that I like, I added the repetition intentionally because I liked it, but thanks for your advice Genni.
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